SAT写作范文VS评分标准

　　下面把我自己写的一篇文章贴出来，并不是说写得很好，但是我觉得sat写作的方向我是找对了。而且让美国老师改过：

　　Assignment

　　“It is true that the most memorable day of our lives re those in which we underwent some personal transformation or awakening?”

　　Essay:

　　The most memorable day of a bird is the day it flies away from its nest. The most memorable day of a pupa is the day it metamorphosizes into a beautiful butterfly. I believe people are the same way. The days of our life when we undergo a transformation
or an awakening are the most meaningful and unforgettable.

　　I love music. I began to play the piano when I was five years old. Although I'm not a great player, I still gain great satisfaction from being a pianist in my own world.

　　In my childhood, I had not experienced failure, trouble, or even success; however, my life has changed ever since I failed to join the school team as a piano player. After the sixth time I finished playing, a teacher told me that I had no ability to play.
Although I cried, I knew what the teacher told me was true; that on the piano, I am clumsy and slow.

　　One day, as I lay on my bed thinking about my problem, I saw a spider over my head getting ready to weave her web. I watched her as she toiled slowly and with great care.

　　Six times she tried to throw her frail thread from one beam to another, and six times it fell short.

　　"Poor thing" I thought. "You too, know what it is to fail."

　　But the spider did not lose hope with the sixth failure. With still more care, she got ready to try for the seventh time.

　　I almost forgot my own trouble as I watched her swing herself out upon the slender line. Would she fail again? No! The thread was carried safely to the beam, and fastened there.

　　"I too, will try a seventh time!" I cried.

　　"The real failure is when you stop trying." Even now I still remember this sentence my mother had told me when I finally got on the school team after trying seven times. I still remember the day that little spider taught me a lesson. It makes me feel as
though I have really grown up.